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Post by Gia on May 31, 2010 0:44:54 GMT -6
OOC: Sorry, Yuna. Will do Takeno tomorrow. Woo!
Zhai Li’s mind tried to wrap itself around what the noblewoman had been told. If it was her, then she was alive and well. Shio had even said he was sure that Prince Zuko’s opponent had been a girl. “That’s all right, Shio,” she told him, her voice not betraying a thing she felt. Her mind hadn’t stopped, though. If it had been her, that also presented another problem. If it was true that the baby Princess Azula had brought back was indeed Karena’s, she worried that her daughter had been raising the child on her own. From what Shio had said, at least there was a point when it seemed as if the relationship between the two had not changed. The noblewoman knew that it was possible that it could, but still… she worried. What if her daughter had been raising the child on her own?
Takeno had come back from taking over Omashu under the command of Princess Azula and Fire Lord Ozai saying that the last time he saw Karena and Zuko together with the Avatar. When he freed them, making it look like one of the other guards had dropped the keys, allowing them to escape; he said the two of them escape together. He had gone after them in an attempt to make it seem as if he was trying to make up for his fellow soldier’s mistake, and saw them leave the area together – along with the Avatar and his group. The Fire Lord had even made a jab at Karena’s weight, making it seem as if he knew she had been pregnant or was pregnant… and who the father was. These were all good signs.
If what Shio said was true, then it could simply mean that they had started on opposite sides, and that things had changed. It was what Zhai Li wanted to hear. Karena had never paid much attention to her lessons as a child. She knew that the young girl would rather have been out training with her father. Even to this day, Zhai Li felt it was not a woman’s place. Still, she was glad that her baby girl could protect herself. Perhaps she was wrong… nonetheless, it wasn’t as if she had done to punish her. It was a woman’s place to know how to take care of a home, even if you had enough money to pay people to take care of it. A woman simply needed to know to do it, as well as take care of a husband and a child. She hoped her motherly instincts had kicked in.
Shaking herself out of her thoughts, Zhai Li turned her mind back to the matter at hand. She was being charged with the boy, who would be staying in Karena’s room. A jab went through her heart at the thought of someone else staying in her daughter’s room other than its original occupant. She was gone… and if she returned, she’d be living with Prince Zuko hopefully, not with them. The noblewoman nodded as she tried to keep her mind where it needed to be. She’d be taking Shio to get new clothes tomorrow, as obviously the ones he was wearing would not do. Of course, she would. Her husband knew little about fashion, and she was the woman of the house.
Her eyes widened in shock when Shio revealed that he was a Waterbender. A Waterbender from the Fire Nation? She assumed that he must have a relative from the Water Tribes, but it was still unusual. “I don’t see how it makes a difference,” she told him, “as long as you keep it yourself outside these walls. You’re better off saying you’re not a bender.” She stood up. “Let me show you to your room.” Turning around and walking towards the other end of the house, she opened the door to her daughter’s room. It still reminded her so much of her beautiful, headstrong daughter. “This will be your room from now on.”
It was not decorated in light, frilly colors and was of similar style to the Master bedroom, so Zhai Li figured Shio would not have a problem. “The bathroom is over there, and our bedroom is down the hall.” She turned around, and went back to the kitchen, sitting back down in her chair, a heavy sigh escaping her lips. She rubbed her forehead, trying to get all the memories of Karena out of her mind, but nothing ever helped with that. It was just that with all the talk of her, she had been thinking about her daughter more than usual. “Could the rumors be true, Makino?” she asked in a soft voice. “From what Takeno said before when he came back from Om… New Ozai, it matches with the rumors of the child being Karena and Zuko’s.”
After delivering Makino the message that Li had given him, the solider went back to his rounds. He was supposed to be on patrol – by himself tonight, since it was getting rather late. His commanding officer trusted him to be able to operate alone; there was always a solider or two close by, so it wasn’t as if you were truly by yourself. His mind wasn’t really on the job tonight – as if it ever was – but he was a bit more distracted than usual. He and Li both had stationed in the capitol before, but neither recently. However, Li had an old platoon mate that had given him some rather juicy information… information that of personal importance to the Resistance. His fellow Resistance member had just come off duty and had gone to a pub to drink with some old platoon mates. All of them were talking about it, and by virtue than they had seen him meant that it was not a rumor.
Prince Zuko had a child, and the mother was Karena, daughter of Makino, founder and leader of the Resistance. Fire Lord Ozai had made a jab at the young woman because her weight. It seemed he suspected that she had been pregnant, and he was right. He wasn’t entirely sure if he was surprised or not by the fact that Prince Zuko was the father. From what the soldiers had said, the fact that Karena was the mother was only a rumor. Some declared it as fact; others said there was no proof. From what the other soldiers had said, there was no doubt of who his father was. The child was supposed to be a spitting image of the banished prince. In his mind, as well, there was no reason for Makino’s daughter’s name to be mentioned – which meant that she must be the child’s mother.
Last time he had seen her, she had been much heavier than in the picture that was hanging on the wall of Makino’s home. There was no reason for that after being banished for over three years. There was still no proof… but much more in the favor of that so-called rumor. So, Li had good information… there was still no excuse for saying Makino’s name in public. It could have gotten him killed, and still might. The older man had been the one to recruit him personally, and for that, he would be forever thankful. For that reason and for that reason alone, Takeno would die to protect him. His job was to get information from inside the Resistance and to try to gain from members from those who had passed certain… unknown tests. He was one of the few trusted with Makino’s identity, as Li had been.
If he had anything to say about it… Li would never make that mistake again.
Takeno was taken out of his reverie when nearby a young girl was nearly run over by a rickshaw. Damn idiots, he thought to himself. There wasn’t much you could do about it, but obviously, the driver hadn’t been watching his surroundings. If he had, he wouldn’t have seen a solider nearby that had to jump out of the way to avoid possibly being hit. The amber-eyed young man had probably been fine, but better safe than sorry, right? The girl, however, had tripped and fell to the ground. Jogging towards her, he saw her midriff before she covered it up. She got up, and knelt down to pick up her stuff. He couldn’t get a good look at her face, but her body seemed rather nice from his angle. Very nice in fact. You didn’t see many women like that, especially not when you were a solider. Those women were not his type.
Kneeling down near her, Takeno began to help her pick up her stuff. “Unless by progress, you mean knocking all your stuff on the ground.” He always felt a joke was a good way to clear the air. “You must not be from around here,” he said in a friendly voice, not about to tell her that he had been distracted and nearly run over as well. “Most of the locals watch out from those idiots.” He gave a slight shake of his head along with a small smile. Normally, his hair would have moved slightly in its ponytail, but he was on duty; his hair was in a top knot. “I’m sorry, I didn’t introduce myself… I’m Takeno. What’s yours?” Up close, the soldier was able to look at her more carefully. She was a beauty, and he thought he caught a glimpse of blue eyes. She was also a few years younger than him – around his sister’s age.
Definitely not from around here, Takeno thought to himself. He then caught himself wondering if she would ask him his rank once she saw his uniform… most did, though it wasn’t of great importance to him. There were always two reactions – either they had great respect for you, or they were slightly afraid you. It wasn’t uncommon for citizens to give him a wide berth, though he hadn’t seen true fear since he was stationed in the Earth Kingdom – pardon, the Colonies. Was that were this new loveliness was from? It didn’t matter to him much. After all, he was a member of the Resistance. Why should he care? All it would take would be for someone’s mouth to slip, he was a dead man. His mind wasn’t on that as much, though, as it was on the new beauty he had just met.
Zhai Li’s mind tried to wrap itself around what the noblewoman had been told. If it was her, then she was alive and well. Shio had even said he was sure that Prince Zuko’s opponent had been a girl. “That’s all right, Shio,” she told him, her voice not betraying a thing she felt. Her mind hadn’t stopped, though. If it had been her, that also presented another problem. If it was true that the baby Princess Azula had brought back was indeed Karena’s, she worried that her daughter had been raising the child on her own. From what Shio had said, at least there was a point when it seemed as if the relationship between the two had not changed. The noblewoman knew that it was possible that it could, but still… she worried. What if her daughter had been raising the child on her own?
Takeno had come back from taking over Omashu under the command of Princess Azula and Fire Lord Ozai saying that the last time he saw Karena and Zuko together with the Avatar. When he freed them, making it look like one of the other guards had dropped the keys, allowing them to escape; he said the two of them escape together. He had gone after them in an attempt to make it seem as if he was trying to make up for his fellow soldier’s mistake, and saw them leave the area together – along with the Avatar and his group. The Fire Lord had even made a jab at Karena’s weight, making it seem as if he knew she had been pregnant or was pregnant… and who the father was. These were all good signs.
If what Shio said was true, then it could simply mean that they had started on opposite sides, and that things had changed. It was what Zhai Li wanted to hear. Karena had never paid much attention to her lessons as a child. She knew that the young girl would rather have been out training with her father. Even to this day, Zhai Li felt it was not a woman’s place. Still, she was glad that her baby girl could protect herself. Perhaps she was wrong… nonetheless, it wasn’t as if she had done to punish her. It was a woman’s place to know how to take care of a home, even if you had enough money to pay people to take care of it. A woman simply needed to know to do it, as well as take care of a husband and a child. She hoped her motherly instincts had kicked in.
Shaking herself out of her thoughts, Zhai Li turned her mind back to the matter at hand. She was being charged with the boy, who would be staying in Karena’s room. A jab went through her heart at the thought of someone else staying in her daughter’s room other than its original occupant. She was gone… and if she returned, she’d be living with Prince Zuko hopefully, not with them. The noblewoman nodded as she tried to keep her mind where it needed to be. She’d be taking Shio to get new clothes tomorrow, as obviously the ones he was wearing would not do. Of course, she would. Her husband knew little about fashion, and she was the woman of the house.
Her eyes widened in shock when Shio revealed that he was a Waterbender. A Waterbender from the Fire Nation? She assumed that he must have a relative from the Water Tribes, but it was still unusual. “I don’t see how it makes a difference,” she told him, “as long as you keep it yourself outside these walls. You’re better off saying you’re not a bender.” She stood up. “Let me show you to your room.” Turning around and walking towards the other end of the house, she opened the door to her daughter’s room. It still reminded her so much of her beautiful, headstrong daughter. “This will be your room from now on.”
It was not decorated in light, frilly colors and was of similar style to the Master bedroom, so Zhai Li figured Shio would not have a problem. “The bathroom is over there, and our bedroom is down the hall.” She turned around, and went back to the kitchen, sitting back down in her chair, a heavy sigh escaping her lips. She rubbed her forehead, trying to get all the memories of Karena out of her mind, but nothing ever helped with that. It was just that with all the talk of her, she had been thinking about her daughter more than usual. “Could the rumors be true, Makino?” she asked in a soft voice. “From what Takeno said before when he came back from Om… New Ozai, it matches with the rumors of the child being Karena and Zuko’s.”
After delivering Makino the message that Li had given him, the solider went back to his rounds. He was supposed to be on patrol – by himself tonight, since it was getting rather late. His commanding officer trusted him to be able to operate alone; there was always a solider or two close by, so it wasn’t as if you were truly by yourself. His mind wasn’t really on the job tonight – as if it ever was – but he was a bit more distracted than usual. He and Li both had stationed in the capitol before, but neither recently. However, Li had an old platoon mate that had given him some rather juicy information… information that of personal importance to the Resistance. His fellow Resistance member had just come off duty and had gone to a pub to drink with some old platoon mates. All of them were talking about it, and by virtue than they had seen him meant that it was not a rumor.
Prince Zuko had a child, and the mother was Karena, daughter of Makino, founder and leader of the Resistance. Fire Lord Ozai had made a jab at the young woman because her weight. It seemed he suspected that she had been pregnant, and he was right. He wasn’t entirely sure if he was surprised or not by the fact that Prince Zuko was the father. From what the soldiers had said, the fact that Karena was the mother was only a rumor. Some declared it as fact; others said there was no proof. From what the other soldiers had said, there was no doubt of who his father was. The child was supposed to be a spitting image of the banished prince. In his mind, as well, there was no reason for Makino’s daughter’s name to be mentioned – which meant that she must be the child’s mother.
Last time he had seen her, she had been much heavier than in the picture that was hanging on the wall of Makino’s home. There was no reason for that after being banished for over three years. There was still no proof… but much more in the favor of that so-called rumor. So, Li had good information… there was still no excuse for saying Makino’s name in public. It could have gotten him killed, and still might. The older man had been the one to recruit him personally, and for that, he would be forever thankful. For that reason and for that reason alone, Takeno would die to protect him. His job was to get information from inside the Resistance and to try to gain from members from those who had passed certain… unknown tests. He was one of the few trusted with Makino’s identity, as Li had been.
If he had anything to say about it… Li would never make that mistake again.
Takeno was taken out of his reverie when nearby a young girl was nearly run over by a rickshaw. Damn idiots, he thought to himself. There wasn’t much you could do about it, but obviously, the driver hadn’t been watching his surroundings. If he had, he wouldn’t have seen a solider nearby that had to jump out of the way to avoid possibly being hit. The amber-eyed young man had probably been fine, but better safe than sorry, right? The girl, however, had tripped and fell to the ground. Jogging towards her, he saw her midriff before she covered it up. She got up, and knelt down to pick up her stuff. He couldn’t get a good look at her face, but her body seemed rather nice from his angle. Very nice in fact. You didn’t see many women like that, especially not when you were a solider. Those women were not his type.
Kneeling down near her, Takeno began to help her pick up her stuff. “Unless by progress, you mean knocking all your stuff on the ground.” He always felt a joke was a good way to clear the air. “You must not be from around here,” he said in a friendly voice, not about to tell her that he had been distracted and nearly run over as well. “Most of the locals watch out from those idiots.” He gave a slight shake of his head along with a small smile. Normally, his hair would have moved slightly in its ponytail, but he was on duty; his hair was in a top knot. “I’m sorry, I didn’t introduce myself… I’m Takeno. What’s yours?” Up close, the soldier was able to look at her more carefully. She was a beauty, and he thought he caught a glimpse of blue eyes. She was also a few years younger than him – around his sister’s age.
Definitely not from around here, Takeno thought to himself. He then caught himself wondering if she would ask him his rank once she saw his uniform… most did, though it wasn’t of great importance to him. There were always two reactions – either they had great respect for you, or they were slightly afraid you. It wasn’t uncommon for citizens to give him a wide berth, though he hadn’t seen true fear since he was stationed in the Earth Kingdom – pardon, the Colonies. Was that were this new loveliness was from? It didn’t matter to him much. After all, he was a member of the Resistance. Why should he care? All it would take would be for someone’s mouth to slip, he was a dead man. His mind wasn’t on that as much, though, as it was on the new beauty he had just met.
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Post by Gia on May 27, 2010 21:58:17 GMT -6
Yuna - Wow... well, I must say that's one of the best samples I've read in quite a while. You're a talented writer, there's no doubt about that. I love the length. I love the edge of the sample, as well as the sense of mystery you put in it. The only real critisism I have is here is that there's not enough about what she looks like or what her surroundings look like, other than some general facts about her room and the fact that she's unnaturally thin. Make sure, in the future, to put a tad more about what the place looks like so others can build upon it and what she looks like. Other than that, wonderful. ACCEPTED
Other than that, wonderful. ACCEPTED
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Post by Gia on May 26, 2010 21:23:40 GMT -6
Please Read this Post!
Hello, members! It's time, once again, for:
♪ ROLE PLAYER . OF. THE . MONTH! ♫
Now, some of you may be scratching your heads, wondering, what the heck is roleplayer of the month!? Well, it's simple, really. Roleplayer of the Month, or RPM, is an monthly award given to a candidate that YOU vote for; the Core Staff nominates, and you, that's right, YOU vote. Normally this'd be up by the 18th, but we were a little behind. ^^;;
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Hello, members! It's time, once again, for:
♪ ROLE PLAYER . OF. THE . MONTH! ♫
Now, some of you may be scratching your heads, wondering, what the heck is roleplayer of the month!? Well, it's simple, really. Roleplayer of the Month, or RPM, is an monthly award given to a candidate that YOU vote for; the Core Staff nominates, and you, that's right, YOU vote. Normally this'd be up by the 18th, but we were a little behind. ^^;;
There are a few rules concerning this award:
1. Core Staff cannot vote. We nominate, that's why.
2. IF YOU ARE NOMINATED, and it will be obvious if you have been, you cannot vote. If you do, you will be disqualified.
That's it. VOTE, VOTE, VOTE! We cannot do this without your votes, and don't you want your fellow members to feel like their hard RPing work has been noticed? Vote! This thread will be locked, but the poll is OPEN!
Poll will automatically lock at 12:00AM CST, on the 1st of June.
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Post by Gia on May 26, 2010 21:14:02 GMT -6
Your prompt has been posted.
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Post by Gia on May 26, 2010 21:13:33 GMT -6
Yuna's Prompt - You are an extremely intelligent 16-year-old loner with low morals, without any friends. Someone a few years older than you, representing someone very bad, comes around and offers to give you everything... in exchange for you working for them. What do you think? What do you want to do? What are you feeling? Dig deep, use only your character, and do not just scratch the surface.
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Post by Gia on May 26, 2010 21:08:47 GMT -6
NOTE: I cleaned out the thread to leave only the open applications. Should be easier to search in now.
Should be easier to search in now.
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Post by Gia on May 22, 2010 23:12:15 GMT -6
OOC: I know, right? I think I may have actually taken longer than you for once lol!
Azula listened to Mai’s words carefully. It seemed she didn’t want to stand still. This usual for the markswoman, but something still seemed a bit off about her. In fact, she had noticed this ever since they had… alleviated her brother and his fiancée from Nikuro. Once again, the Princess was left thinking. The only conclusion she could come to was that Mai was jealous. It seemed ridiculous, as her friend was the least jealous person she had met. However, the fact remained that she was. It was silly, because the golden-eyed young woman knew that her friend did not want a child. It must be the simple fact Zuko was not with her, but Karena. Of course, Azula knew that Mai had feelings, but this whole situation was odd. Sure, Mai had a crush on Zuko when they were kids, but still to have those feelings now?
It was another odd concept for the Princess. Azula had never had a crush on anyone; she was unfamiliar with how long these crushes were supposed to last. She was sure, however, based on what she did know, that they weren’t supposed to last this long. Was it possible that Mai’s feelings for her brother were stronger than just a crush? No that was absurd… As far as Azula was concerned, what were the chances of that? Sure, Zuko may have had a mild crush on Mai when they were kids. Whatever for, Azula will never know. The fact remains that her markswoman friend was not chosen as Zuko’s future wife. Karena was, simply because of the fact that she was a stronger bender. Maybe if Mai had been chosen instead, things would be different.
In fact, it made a bit more sense to Azula for her father to have chosen someone closer to the royal family, like one of her friends. However, he did not, and went to an acquaintance from school. Regardless, Azula would have found it weird if Mai or Ty Lee had been chosen – especially Ty Lee – and she found it even more weird now that Mai liked Zuko, and not as just a friend. All the while she was thinking, the brunette never flinched. It was simpler not to let Mai know what she was thinking. The firebender could think of taunts she could tease her with, but there was a much better time for things like that. Besides, she wasn’t in the mood right now.
“Of course,” Azula said her voice even. “I haven’t seen her yet today, though. She seems to like Nikuro. Perhaps you should check there?” She carefully raised one eyebrow for a moment, before giving a light shrug. It was foolish to think that Mai would go and see her… nephew. In fact, since they’d gotten off the boat, to Azula’s knowledge, she hadn’t seen him once. Why should she after all? “She’ll surface eventually, I’m sure. You know how she is.” A small sigh escaped the brunette’s lips. “Sparring sounds like a good idea.” Her mind shifted to Lakano, and a wave of anger seethed through her. She knew that she was getting obsessed with him. It wasn’t healthy, she knew that, but she couldn’t help it. She needed revenge… at whatever cost.
Azula listened to Mai’s words carefully. It seemed she didn’t want to stand still. This usual for the markswoman, but something still seemed a bit off about her. In fact, she had noticed this ever since they had… alleviated her brother and his fiancée from Nikuro. Once again, the Princess was left thinking. The only conclusion she could come to was that Mai was jealous. It seemed ridiculous, as her friend was the least jealous person she had met. However, the fact remained that she was. It was silly, because the golden-eyed young woman knew that her friend did not want a child. It must be the simple fact Zuko was not with her, but Karena. Of course, Azula knew that Mai had feelings, but this whole situation was odd. Sure, Mai had a crush on Zuko when they were kids, but still to have those feelings now?
It was another odd concept for the Princess. Azula had never had a crush on anyone; she was unfamiliar with how long these crushes were supposed to last. She was sure, however, based on what she did know, that they weren’t supposed to last this long. Was it possible that Mai’s feelings for her brother were stronger than just a crush? No that was absurd… As far as Azula was concerned, what were the chances of that? Sure, Zuko may have had a mild crush on Mai when they were kids. Whatever for, Azula will never know. The fact remains that her markswoman friend was not chosen as Zuko’s future wife. Karena was, simply because of the fact that she was a stronger bender. Maybe if Mai had been chosen instead, things would be different.
In fact, it made a bit more sense to Azula for her father to have chosen someone closer to the royal family, like one of her friends. However, he did not, and went to an acquaintance from school. Regardless, Azula would have found it weird if Mai or Ty Lee had been chosen – especially Ty Lee – and she found it even more weird now that Mai liked Zuko, and not as just a friend. All the while she was thinking, the brunette never flinched. It was simpler not to let Mai know what she was thinking. The firebender could think of taunts she could tease her with, but there was a much better time for things like that. Besides, she wasn’t in the mood right now.
“Of course,” Azula said her voice even. “I haven’t seen her yet today, though. She seems to like Nikuro. Perhaps you should check there?” She carefully raised one eyebrow for a moment, before giving a light shrug. It was foolish to think that Mai would go and see her… nephew. In fact, since they’d gotten off the boat, to Azula’s knowledge, she hadn’t seen him once. Why should she after all? “She’ll surface eventually, I’m sure. You know how she is.” A small sigh escaped the brunette’s lips. “Sparring sounds like a good idea.” Her mind shifted to Lakano, and a wave of anger seethed through her. She knew that she was getting obsessed with him. It wasn’t healthy, she knew that, but she couldn’t help it. She needed revenge… at whatever cost.
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Post by Gia on May 22, 2010 20:20:55 GMT -6
First post updated to reflect a new member! Welcome, Zana!
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Post by Gia on May 22, 2010 20:13:02 GMT -6
Okay, I say yes. PM me and we can try and work out something for getting Zana into this.
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Post by Gia on May 21, 2010 23:05:06 GMT -6
I'm sorry for the wait, Zana, but I've had some internet problems recently. Let me give it some thought and I'll get back to you tomorrow most likely.
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Post by Gia on May 21, 2010 23:03:09 GMT -6
Zana - Sorry for the wait. Interesting choice of prompt. I must say that while your post is good, the emotion was missing in your post. I liked the length, to be sure, but from now on, work on getting emotion in your post, and a bit more description on your surroundings. Not bad, though, not bad at all. ACCEPTED.
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Post by Gia on May 17, 2010 21:48:53 GMT -6
Happy belated birthday, Gen Bai Ru!
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Post by Gia on May 17, 2010 16:12:20 GMT -6
Zana, before I consider this... being a member of the Resistance would require Zana to be in the Fire Nation, captiol preferrably. Is that possible for her?
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Post by Gia on May 13, 2010 19:11:41 GMT -6
Dao - Much better. I still think that you could have used some more description on Dao himself, so as long as you keep that in mind as you RP, you're ACCEPTED.
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Post by Gia on May 12, 2010 15:26:50 GMT -6
Dao Feng - On the positive side, I see only one spelling mistake when you said on-bedroom apartment instead of one bedroom apartment. On the not-so positive side... your post is extremely short. I have no idea what his place looks like, who the people are that are in his home or why they are there. There is not nearly enough description in your post, either. His kitchen is his pride and joy, but why? How does he know how to fight? Why isn't he scared of them? Why are these people there? What do they want with him? Why were they messing up his kitchen? These are questions that need to be answered. Simply re-do your post and then post it again. I'm sorry but your post is DENIED.
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Post by Gia on May 4, 2010 10:05:05 GMT -6
Here it is, people. Simply post your prompt, following the rules and using the form below:1. No posts under 700 characters allowed. It's difficult to do a really good post, but have it be short.
2. No controlling other characters. That's against the rules in any RPG board. We want to see how well you can RP if there are other people present who you cannot control.
3. NPC's are not allowed. These posts are intended to be monologues. As I said above, we are looking to see how well you RP when no one else is around.
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5. No OOC posts allowed, no exceptions. We don't want to see anything else besides your RP post and the form.
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[b]Real Age:[/b]
[b]Gender:[/b]
REMEMBER, your posts do not have to be in the Avatar's world. They can be anywhere. ALSO NOTE, that since you have to create the story for your post, these are a little harder than the Prompt Exemptions, where you are given yours.Good Luck and may the Force be with you!
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Post by Gia on May 4, 2010 9:57:30 GMT -6
Here it is, people.
If you want to do the Prompt Exemptions, than fill out the form below. Then, go to the Prompt Exemption Samples thread and wait for your prompt to be posted. After you have posted the sign up application, there should be no other replies or posts of any kind on here from you.
REMEMBER, the prompts will not be limited to the Avatar's world, so your sample shouldn't be either.
Exemption Form -
[b]Display Name:[/b]
[b]Age:[/b] (REAL LIFE AGE)
[b]Gender:[/b]
[b]Is English your first language?:[/b] (Yes or No)
[b]Your Prompt?:[/b] (Vague or Straightforward)
Remember to remove anything in parenthesis before you post.Good Luck and may the Force be with you!
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Post by Gia on May 4, 2010 9:41:47 GMT -6
Here it is, people. Make sure you have signed up first in the Sign-up thread, and then come here and wait for your prompt to be posted. Remember these rules:1. No posts under 700 characters allowed. It's difficult to do a really good post, but have it be short.
2. No controlling other characters. That's against the rules in any RPG board. We want to see how well you can RP if there are other people present who you cannot control.
3. NPC's are not allowed. These posts are intended to be monologues. As I said above, we are looking to see how well you RP when no one else is around.
4. If you pass, but go into the regular RP boards, and slip, you will be forced to go to do another sample, whether Prompt or Free Form. If you fail, you will have to redo your exemption. In the event that you have to redo your exemption, you are not required to write another exemption.
5. No OOC posts allowed, no exceptions. We don't want to see anything else besides your RP post and a header entitled "[Insert Your Name Here]'s RP Sample".
6. Don't re-post your prompt. If you can roleplay well, we will know what it is.
6. Age does not matter. There have been plenty of decent roleplayers of a young age. We ask for your age to get an idea of what you're like based on your age and how well you write.
7. Don't sell yourself short when writing your prompt! We're looking for good posts of decent length. We might deny your exemption for any of the following reasons, including but not limited to: not enough description, spelling errors, grammar errors, bad formatting.
REMEMBER, your posts do not have to be in the Avatar's world. They can be anywhere.Good Luck and may the Force be with you!
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Post by Gia on May 3, 2010 21:44:04 GMT -6
Mzia - You didn't have to write an entirely new sample. That's why I told you to just make the changes and then re-post your sample. I'm sorry if there was confusion about that. Anyway, this one was better. However, I will say that there is not enough description. There's nothing about what the place looks like or how she feels about it. I get the idea, but there's no depth. If I was RPing with you, I'd have to make up what the place looks like myself. I will say that on the condition that you work on that, your post is ACCEPTED.
I'm sorry if there was confusion about that. Anyway, this one was better. However, I will say that there is not enough description. There's nothing about what the place looks like or how she feels about it. I get the idea, but there's no depth. If I was RPing with you, I'd have to make up what the place looks like myself. I will say that on the condition that you work on that, your post is ACCEPTED.
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