Thanks for applying for Ursa. Now, let's see about your post. It's not accurate to the canon plot, but I wouldn't except you to know that. I do wonder how those people knew the Avatar was coming, though.

The first thing I noticed was that you said Ursa was twenty-nine. This would mean she had Zuko at twelve, seeing as how he's nearly seventeen. I find this highly unlikely. Seeing as how the age that a person becomes an adult is sixteen, she'd be at least thirty three, and that's if she got married and had Zuko before her seventeenth birthday.

The next thing that I think you need to work on is the description. You have a lot of NPC dialogue, and not enough of what's she's thinking or feeling. Personally, I would rewrite it as a monologue - which is what accepted canon apps usually are.

You got her two major relationships - Zuko and Azulon, but I would have liked to see more of Ozai, since we have an Ozia. I woudl have also liked to see little more about how being banished has affected her and her feelings of now being on the other side of the war. I would have also liked to see a bit more of her history. I know you don't know it from the show, but you're allowed artistic license here. I also don't see much of her appearance.

Also, you don't have the secret word in here. It's scattered letter-by-letter throughout the Rules and FAQ's, so you'll need that, too, before it's accepted.

You seem to have a good basis for Ursa, I just think you need more of it is all. I liked to see you re-write this using what I've said here. You can wait for someone else to respond. You need three out of four acceptances, but if I were you, I'd use what I said. You're free to wait, if you want, though, but I can almost guaratee they're going to agree with me.

Edit: One more thing... I also think that if Ursa had rushed at Azulon like that she wouldn't have just been banished. It's possible, though, but personally, I think she stuck up for Zuko and traded her life for his, and she was just banished. *shrugs*