Post by Gia on Aug 16, 2010 20:39:10 GMT -6
This thread is meant for more experienced RPers, but if you're newer and can still use it, then fine. This is to show how you've changed since you first started RPing. Basically, just post something from then, and then a more recent post to show how far you've come. Neither of your posts have to be from TARP, but if you can't prove that the account your post is from is yours (ie, different e-mails), then don't post it, because it will be removed. Comments are fine, but please, try and post your own examples if you're going to comment on other people's.
New members, please don't take offense to anything in this thread. Everyone has to start somewhere. This is how that everyone starts somewhere.
TARP was not my first RP site, but I'd only realized what RP was about a year before. This is from early on in TARP:
Dated October 30, 2005 4:30 PM CST. Link.
Character Count: 152
Karena had just been there with Aang, sometimes stroking his shoulder or his forehead, when she heard someone come in the room, and speak to her. Looking up, there was Xiaoyu, Haru’s older sister. The woman seemed certain that something had happened to her brother. The Firebender wasn’t sure how the other woman could possibly know that, but then again, they were siblings. She had heard about unusual connections between twins. It was possibly that, since they were so close, that they, too, shared this connection. It seemed a bit unusual to her, but Xiaoyu was worried, nevertheless. She wasn’t the only one. The young mother was concerned about Zuko, who was there, as well. The dark-haired woman reminded herself that her fiancé was a very skilled Firebender, and would be able to take care of himself just fine.
Motioning for Xiaoyu to come over, Karena gestured to the bed next to her. She wasn’t sure whose it was, most likely it belonged to Katara. The Waterbender would have wanted to be as close as she could to Aang, of course. Once the other woman had sat down, the brown-eyed young woman gave her a confronting smile. “I would tell you not to worry about it, but that would be stupid,” the Firebender told her. “I’m worrying about Zuko constantly, but, that’s beside the point.” She looked at her for a moment, before continuing. “Even if something has happened to Haru, Lakano’s there, remember? Trust me, I don’t think he will let anything happen to him.” A lover’s wrath could be fierce. If anything happened to Zuko, there was no telling what she would to avenge him – not that anything serious had happened to Haru, of course.
This was not the way things should be. Karena should be out there, fighting! She was a warrior. Glancing back to Aang, she squeezed the young man’s shoulder. You’re not just a warrior anymore, are you? the young woman told herself. Things are going to be dangerous. If something happens to Zuko, you have to raise your son alone. That thought caused her a lot of pain, but it was true. What are you supposed to do, go into battle so that you both have a chance of getting killed? It was a troubling thought, but a true one. She wouldn’t be able to go into battle anymore, would she? Her fighting days were over. The Firebender would train, of course, as she still wanted to be a Master one day, but… no matter battles, no more fights for her. She needed to stay safe, for her son, for little Nikuro. She had no idea how much her life would change by having a baby.
Karena hated admitting that her mother had been right all along, but facts were facts. She should have listened more. The Firebender remembered that Aang was awake, and she had not introduced him and Xiaoyu. How rude of her. “I don’t think you two have met,” she said aloud. “Aang, this is Xiaoyu, Haru’s older sister. Xiaoyu, this is Aang.” Oh, how wished that this night would go by faster. She wanted Zuko back with her. Of course, them coming back meant that they were off to the Fire Nation, where all but a few were wanted people. It would make things much more complicated. It would not be easy, but it was what needed to be done. Ozai and Azula needed to be taken down. What was that saying? Doing the right thing wasn’t always easy. Boy, wasn’t that the truth. The young woman took a deep breath. Right now, all she wanted was for Zuko to come back. Everything else could wait. Of course, she was going to stay with Aang as long as he wanted her there.
Speaking of Aang, the young man was still laying on his side, facing both Karena and Xiaoyu. He said how everything was his fault – Nikuro being stolen, Haru being injured, everything. If anything bad happened at Sabaku, that was his fault, too, for being injured, being unconscious for a week and a half, and for not being there. Looking back at him, the Firebender gave him a comforting smile. “Aang, none of this is your fault,” the young woman told him. “This is all Azula’s fault. My baby being stolen, you being injured… that’s all Azula’s fault, not yours. Things will happen whether we want them to or not.” Reaching her hand back, the Firebender laid it on the young Avatar’s shoulder, giving it a slight rub. “It’s not your fault, so don’t think for a second that it is. Just wait for Katara to get back so she can look at your back, and then concentrate and letting your back get better. Oh, and yes, the world thinking you’re dead is a good thing because no one will see you coming.”
Pausing for a second, a thought crossed Karena’s mind. “Are you hungry? I can see if I can find something to eat.” The Firebender wondered why she was having to comfort everyone. It was true that she didn’t need comforting right now, cause she knew in her heart that no matter how worried she was about Zuko, that he would come back to her in one piece. Her fiancé was very skilled, and would be just fine. No one had to tell her that. I suppose it’s not so bad that I have to confront people, the young mother told herself. I guess it’s a good thing that I am capable of doing that, right? “Oh, and by the way, Aang, Zuko has agreed to teach you Firebending… when you’re better, of course. Oh, and he has… something to tell you, but it’s not my business to tell you that.”
The young woman paused again, as she wondered what Aang would think about having to learn Firebending. “Don’t worry about learning Firebending. It’s part of you are, and… you and I will be training together.”
Character Count: 5510 (and I've done better)
Yeah, I feel ashamed now looking back at the old post, I mean, really...
Edit: 2nd Longest Single Character Post on TARP - This is as Lakano, and while Shio may have the longest single character post, still... I have the character count already in it.
My Longest Single Character Post EVER - Again, the character count is already there, and while there is an NPC, still...
Edit: By single character, I don't mean, I mean one character - ie, Lakano or Karena, if you look at my first post. I consider my latter post a single character cause it was Stephen, not Stephen and Jack (another character of mine) but Stephen.
New members, please don't take offense to anything in this thread. Everyone has to start somewhere. This is how that everyone starts somewhere.
TARP was not my first RP site, but I'd only realized what RP was about a year before. This is from early on in TARP:
Dated October 30, 2005 4:30 PM CST. Link.
Karena started coughing from all the smoke, and put her hands up to shield herself from whatever Zuko was going to do, trying to see through the smoke.
Character Count: 152
Village near Sabaku
Karena had just been there with Aang, sometimes stroking his shoulder or his forehead, when she heard someone come in the room, and speak to her. Looking up, there was Xiaoyu, Haru’s older sister. The woman seemed certain that something had happened to her brother. The Firebender wasn’t sure how the other woman could possibly know that, but then again, they were siblings. She had heard about unusual connections between twins. It was possibly that, since they were so close, that they, too, shared this connection. It seemed a bit unusual to her, but Xiaoyu was worried, nevertheless. She wasn’t the only one. The young mother was concerned about Zuko, who was there, as well. The dark-haired woman reminded herself that her fiancé was a very skilled Firebender, and would be able to take care of himself just fine.
Motioning for Xiaoyu to come over, Karena gestured to the bed next to her. She wasn’t sure whose it was, most likely it belonged to Katara. The Waterbender would have wanted to be as close as she could to Aang, of course. Once the other woman had sat down, the brown-eyed young woman gave her a confronting smile. “I would tell you not to worry about it, but that would be stupid,” the Firebender told her. “I’m worrying about Zuko constantly, but, that’s beside the point.” She looked at her for a moment, before continuing. “Even if something has happened to Haru, Lakano’s there, remember? Trust me, I don’t think he will let anything happen to him.” A lover’s wrath could be fierce. If anything happened to Zuko, there was no telling what she would to avenge him – not that anything serious had happened to Haru, of course.
This was not the way things should be. Karena should be out there, fighting! She was a warrior. Glancing back to Aang, she squeezed the young man’s shoulder. You’re not just a warrior anymore, are you? the young woman told herself. Things are going to be dangerous. If something happens to Zuko, you have to raise your son alone. That thought caused her a lot of pain, but it was true. What are you supposed to do, go into battle so that you both have a chance of getting killed? It was a troubling thought, but a true one. She wouldn’t be able to go into battle anymore, would she? Her fighting days were over. The Firebender would train, of course, as she still wanted to be a Master one day, but… no matter battles, no more fights for her. She needed to stay safe, for her son, for little Nikuro. She had no idea how much her life would change by having a baby.
Karena hated admitting that her mother had been right all along, but facts were facts. She should have listened more. The Firebender remembered that Aang was awake, and she had not introduced him and Xiaoyu. How rude of her. “I don’t think you two have met,” she said aloud. “Aang, this is Xiaoyu, Haru’s older sister. Xiaoyu, this is Aang.” Oh, how wished that this night would go by faster. She wanted Zuko back with her. Of course, them coming back meant that they were off to the Fire Nation, where all but a few were wanted people. It would make things much more complicated. It would not be easy, but it was what needed to be done. Ozai and Azula needed to be taken down. What was that saying? Doing the right thing wasn’t always easy. Boy, wasn’t that the truth. The young woman took a deep breath. Right now, all she wanted was for Zuko to come back. Everything else could wait. Of course, she was going to stay with Aang as long as he wanted her there.
Speaking of Aang, the young man was still laying on his side, facing both Karena and Xiaoyu. He said how everything was his fault – Nikuro being stolen, Haru being injured, everything. If anything bad happened at Sabaku, that was his fault, too, for being injured, being unconscious for a week and a half, and for not being there. Looking back at him, the Firebender gave him a comforting smile. “Aang, none of this is your fault,” the young woman told him. “This is all Azula’s fault. My baby being stolen, you being injured… that’s all Azula’s fault, not yours. Things will happen whether we want them to or not.” Reaching her hand back, the Firebender laid it on the young Avatar’s shoulder, giving it a slight rub. “It’s not your fault, so don’t think for a second that it is. Just wait for Katara to get back so she can look at your back, and then concentrate and letting your back get better. Oh, and yes, the world thinking you’re dead is a good thing because no one will see you coming.”
Pausing for a second, a thought crossed Karena’s mind. “Are you hungry? I can see if I can find something to eat.” The Firebender wondered why she was having to comfort everyone. It was true that she didn’t need comforting right now, cause she knew in her heart that no matter how worried she was about Zuko, that he would come back to her in one piece. Her fiancé was very skilled, and would be just fine. No one had to tell her that. I suppose it’s not so bad that I have to confront people, the young mother told herself. I guess it’s a good thing that I am capable of doing that, right? “Oh, and by the way, Aang, Zuko has agreed to teach you Firebending… when you’re better, of course. Oh, and he has… something to tell you, but it’s not my business to tell you that.”
The young woman paused again, as she wondered what Aang would think about having to learn Firebending. “Don’t worry about learning Firebending. It’s part of you are, and… you and I will be training together.”
Character Count: 5510 (and I've done better)
Yeah, I feel ashamed now looking back at the old post, I mean, really...
Edit: 2nd Longest Single Character Post on TARP - This is as Lakano, and while Shio may have the longest single character post, still... I have the character count already in it.
My Longest Single Character Post EVER - Again, the character count is already there, and while there is an NPC, still...
Edit: By single character, I don't mean, I mean one character - ie, Lakano or Karena, if you look at my first post. I consider my latter post a single character cause it was Stephen, not Stephen and Jack (another character of mine) but Stephen.