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Hey, sorry for the delays! We should be up and running by the end of the week, if all goes well — I just relocated to be closer to my office, so things have been a little hectic on my side.

Any ongoing stories now would be based on what you have decided for your character(s) to accommodate the time shift. Reach out to your RP partner(s) to arrange any continuations, and of course, you're totally free to create new "present-day" plotlines as well.

@laceanddoodles if you have a question / want to talk about RP ideas, it's probably better to put them in [hc] or in the Plotting board! It's fine if you ramble about your RP thoughts here, but this area is really meant for out of character stuff!

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Wurf, I need to find a better work / game / RP balance lmao. I needed to decompress from my last patch a lot and wound up doing literally nothing during my week off. Winter holiday break is coming up soon, so I fully intend to find that balance. 

o/ Hatsuharu would probably be a good fit; he's not a great teacher, exactly, but he's a competent, probably advanced level firebender (though he opts not to do anything particularly taxing with his skills).

Here you go! — Shelter Me, O Spirits

sounds good to me! i'll go ahead and set up the thread and link it here when i'm done

hey lace! i think Kioko would probably be a really natural pairing for una, since kioko is a midwife — it would be a super easy segue into why they start talking to each other. alternatively, my Ling is in ba sing se as a private investigator, or Hatsuharu is somewhere in the earth kingdom (an unnamed village) and he's a tailor. any of those catch your fancy?

Obsessed with this rn

I won NaNo once back in 2009! I kinda wanted to do it this time but to be honest I was so burnt out from my work that I just took the entire week off to be a vegetable xD Maybe next year! I have several WIPs that could use with some NaNo-driven focused writing time.

Hey hey, thanks for sharing your work!




1. The premise itself seems good. I'm interested in what's happening, especially since I don't have a synopsis of the plot, so that's a point in your favour.

2. I definitely do see that you do over-explain things. I think that is a pretty common pitfall for more inexperienced long-form writers, especially if they're coming from an RP background where you have to get the circumstances / environment just so to make sure that your RP partner(s) understand the scene. The thing is though, you don't have to do that with long-form prose; it's often better to keep things more vague (unless the specific callouts have a purpose that will be relevant to the story at some point) so that the reader's imagination can be more creative.

To elaborate on that, I've got an example passage below:



You don't particularly need to describe the colours of a forest. Unless the forest had been burnt down or covered in snow (in which case, it would be worth mentioning), the default assumption of a reader would be that a forest has some assortment of greens and browns. It's an unnecessary detail except to establish that the sun is up, which you can put in later in a more 'active' voice by making the sun interact with the character. A couple things I would encourage you to watch out for are some wording mistakes as well — if something is 'eerie' its unlikely to be 'peaceful' as 'eerie' means strange and perhaps spooky, which is the opposite of peaceful. I would re-examine the words used and make sure they match. Is the wood supposed to be a bit spooky? If so, I would leave out 'peaceful' and keep 'eerie stillness'. If they're not, I would take out 'and eerie' to leave 'peaceful stillness'. Also, watch out for sentence fragments and repetition — if we take out the modifiers, the second sentence reads "The stillness of the wood broken by the sound of a young girl," which is only a partial sentence.

If this were me, I would probably do something like this instead:



You'll notice that it's shorter, but also punchier. The opening is in active voice (the cracking broke, the girl trampled) as opposed to passive (the silence was broken). I took out some repetitive wording ("clambered over fallen trees" is somewhat repeated in "scrambled over the bark of a long-dead oak tree") and unnecessary descriptions (removed "husk", as that is already implied by "long-dead"). I also switched it up so that Lily's actions are more active (interacting with her environment by squinting into the sun, pushing aside foliage) rather than having the environment solely described adjacent to her.

It's really not bad, so don't feel discouraged; a lot of this will likely be caught by an editor / beta reader (so be sure to use one) or even the first couple of editing passes. Of course, your style is your own and no one can tell you what's right and wrong in that regard! But some general tips:

- If you want to keep the reader wrapped in the moment, use active voice
- If you want to be more flowery and passive, save it for moments that are more still, with less action / excitement
- Unless the description is particularly important, try to leave things to the imagination for the reader. Assume they're smart and know what generic things look like (woods, trees, pants, shirts) unless there is something special about that generic thing (eg: a door with a strange symbol should have the symbol described, but you don't need to go into the details of the door's construction).
- Use full sentences, and when you need to join up two ideas that aren't full sentences on their own but are somewhat related, the semi-colon is your friend
- Be aware of your words; use descriptors deliberately, with purpose. If you say "cold and frigid" is that adding anything extra than just saying "frigid"?

I hope this helps! And I hope you'll share more as you write :D

Hi! Would you be interested in a thread with Ling or Kioko , both of whom are in Ba Sing Se? They're a bit older than Emona, but not by a lot (:

Hatsuharu is also available, but he's located in a small village somewhere in the middle of the Earth Kingdom instead.

Sounds good!

Do you want to use the Moonpeach Cafe community thread as a starting point so they can feel each other out in a neutral ground? Or would you prefer a more directed thread?

I haven't, but I think this is GREAT. I would honestly, honestly, love a live action ATLA that appropriately casts the right age and ethnicities for all the characters. I think this is very thoughtful as well, it doesn't default to just well-known actresses (eg: I see a lot of fancasts with Zendaya as Katara and its kinda like, do you only know one brown person or...?).