Hey, guys, please don't argue! Thank you Karena for the advice, I'll take all the constructive critisizm you dish out, just don't be rude. As for being more descriptive, I revised the first chapter a bit, adding a description of Haku, so you can go back and read that. I meant the first couple chapters to be somewhat mysterious, but I guess I see what you mean. And finally, thanx Mr. Face, I'm glad you like my story! kk, enough chitter-chatter, on with the 3rd chapter!

Chapter 3: Trading Help

When the girl came back, she sported a broken wrist and burns all over her arms. Haku told her that these injuries were mild compared to what would come if she didn’t talk. But somehow she could tell that he did not believe that she would give up.
As soon as the escort guard was gone, Haku came into her cell and splinted her wrist as well as putting ointment on her burns. When he was done, the girl looked up at him. A tear ran down her cheek.
“Why are you helping me?”
“Because I know what it’s like to be a prisoner.”
The girl bowed her head. “My name is Yuki.”
Haku smiled. “Finally! I was beginning to think you were a mute!”
Yuki managed a tiny smile and said, “You should get out before someone sees you.”
Haku grinned and walked out, locking the door behind him.
After a while, Yuki sighed. “I was the leader of the rebellion.”
Haku raised his eyebrows. “How did they catch you?”
She scowled. “Twenty soldiers surrounded me. I took out four with my Fire Bending, and I knocked three more unconscious, but there was still too many. They tied me up and dragged me here.”
“Did anyone else survive?”
Yuki nodded, “I thin they only killed about four of us, so all the others got away.”
“Then there’s still hope.”
“I suppose.” She paused. “What about your sister? Have you tried rescuing her?”
“Tried, “Haku told her. “I want to help the world, but I’m stuck in here…What I want to do is run away and find the Avatar… but if I go, they’ll kill Kaida for sure. Besides, everyone knows the Avatar hasn’t been seen in a century.”
“Haku?”
“Hmm?”
“I will help you, when the time comes, if you help me escape, too.”
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Like it? I hope so. I've almost finished the story, though. I'm just going back and editing it, looking for areas to improve, you know. I've also started to draw the characters, and if I can, I'll post the pics here! But, anyway, comment please! ;D You know the drill!

Peace Out - Yuki